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I think it's after midnight.

The whole house is asleep, even the stairs, the doors, the floors, the walls.  I can hear things winding down, even so long after they've been left alone.  There are more people here than usual.  More than the house fits.  I think more are coming tomorrow.  I don't know when they'll all go.  Soon, probably.  Too soon.

It's warm, summer.  Snoring in the other room.  I know someone's there, of course.  Hope I don't wake them.  How many people have come here in the last few days?  I haven't even bothered to count.  The atmosphere is weary, the sound and smell and pressure of so many people worn out after a long day.

I was with them for many hours today.  I saw so many that were not like me.  A few that were.  But mostly too different to compare.  One of them scared me.  I haven't seen him in quite awhile, but he's almost like me.  Almost.  Almost exactly.  He showed me one path I could take.  He is isolated, even though he is finally home.

Another of them showed me another path.  Strong and smart and fun, but is he where he is needed?  Maybe he is, I don't know.  But the hurt one is the one I should mimic.  Somehow.

There are some animals here as well, some of them.  Some graceful and sly, some boisterous and towering.  Different.  All of them different.  Maybe some of them are more like me than I know.  But even if they are, how can I ask?  They're all sleeping, just like the house.

Just like the world.

I am tired.
©2009 *Q-Lok
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Greetings from Chicago. I'm certain that my announcement of vacation time is probably going to be read by some of you as a jubilant shout, but I mean it more as a tired groan. I'm pretty exhausted from the family reunion that I'm currently in the middle of, but that's really not what all of this is about when you get down to it.

I did write this piece as a sort of description of what I've seen around me over the past day, but honestly? There's a much more abstract, allegorical meaning to this one. And it's one that I put in on purpose, though I'm not genuinely certain whether or not I want anyone to understand it.

The meaning itself, I will leave as an exercise for the reader.

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This is really...different, but in a good way :) It seems as though its coming from perhaps a human perspective but it never really says so... is it supposed to be a ghost or a spirit? Awesome btw ;D

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Freedom is not worth having if it does not include the freedom to make mistakes. ~Mohandas Gandhi

"No great genius has ever existed without some touch of madness." ~Lucius Seneca
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Thank you. I appreciate your praise.

As for the perspective... Well, it's me, whatever that really means. I guess this is one of those times where it's up to you to decide whether it's my physical and external "human" observations or whether it's a bit more on the spiritual or mental sides of things. I'm honestly not certain which way is better.

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Good cheese comes from happy cave spiders; happy cave spiders come from Boatmurdered!

Baby Bluefire says: "I'm laser convince-able!"
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Oh, and thank you for the favorite, as well. I forgot to mention that a minute ago.

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</ego>

Good cheese comes from happy cave spiders; happy cave spiders come from Boatmurdered!

Baby Bluefire says: "I'm laser convince-able!"
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Good to see the more observent type of writing; kinda like American Psycho, 'cept its you (a real person) talking. Did you ever plan to get your thoughts like this again, or was this purely a spur of the moment matter.

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Don't be eager, call in four days...

"Dream no small dreams for they have no power to move the hearts of men."
~Johann Wolfgang von Goethe
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Thanks, Dare. I'm glad you like it.

No, I didn't forethink this, and the whole symbolic side was developed after I started writing. Before that, it was just a pointless ramble, but I am rather happy with the finished product.

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</ego>

Good cheese comes from happy cave spiders; happy cave spiders come from Boatmurdered!

Baby Bluefire says: "I'm laser convince-able!"
:iconideya-freak:
*nods* Alright then, yeah it turned out pretty good! I do love your work, you're welcome^^

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Don't be eager, call in four days...

"Dream no small dreams for they have no power to move the hearts of men."
~Johann Wolfgang von Goethe
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Thanks again. Thank you, also, for the fave. ^_^

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</ego>

Good cheese comes from happy cave spiders; happy cave spiders come from Boatmurdered!

Baby Bluefire says: "I'm laser convince-able!"
:iconideya-freak:
No problem!^^

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Don't be eager, call in four days...

"Dream no small dreams for they have no power to move the hearts of men."
~Johann Wolfgang von Goethe
:icontribblesame:
I like it either way. The 'mystery' of it is what i like about it

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Freedom is not worth having if it does not include the freedom to make mistakes. ~Mohandas Gandhi

"No great genius has ever existed without some touch of madness." ~Lucius Seneca

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